Rough Cut Feedback

1) How well have the technical areas been produced? (Camera, Mise en Scene, Sound and Editing)
- Use of long shots and blur worked well, and created enigmas.
- Long transitions with the overlap give the audience something to focus on all the time.
- Costume is realistic and makes the audience relates to the character.
- Natural lighting shows the use of the flashbacks
- Sound track is parallel to the narrative and genre of the clip.
- The clothing and make up on the girl creates enigma as we wonder why she is hurt and in this state.
- Sound track is parallel to the visual, engaging the audience.
- Used a variety of shots, costume and makeup fit the story line.
- Really good jump cuts and blends between the scenes.
- Camera techniques and positioning are good.

2) How well has the genre characteristics been used? Can you identify the sub genre?
- We identified the sub genre as crime, but can clearly state that it looks like a thriller convention as it has common thriller traits.
- Hard to identify the sub genre of this thriller, by the shot types and editing I could tell this is a thriller.
- The soundtrack and sound effects create an eerie feel; it creates a distorted effect which contributes to the enigmas. The blood on the costume is scary - crime? The added sound effects add to the thriller genre.

3) What do you like about the rough cut?
- Realistic costume, lighting, location. Really effective soundtrack and sound effects. Clear use of flashbacks which create questions, the variation between the clear and blurred shots mirror the blurred memory.
- In rough cut I like the background music as it fits well to the genre and there are different sounds blending together. Also I like that some of the sounds were louder and could only be heard for a few seconds, when scenes from the previous night were shown. Another thing I liked about this rough cut were the transitions which were added because it makes it more interesting than only using cuts.
- I liked the constant blur at the beginning of the rough cut. Excellent editing which gives it a mysterious feel.
- The flashbacks continuity really good, sound track creates a sense of ambiguity regarding the narrative.

4) How can they improve the rough cut and what constructive criticism can you give the group?
- Establishing shot of the pub could have been clearer. The shot of the necklace could have focused on what she was holding so it is clearer. Pub scene could have slightly higher key lighting to make the narrative clearer.
- Editing is good but too many dissolves, could use a different transition.
- Costume needs to be a little more extreme, (i.e. torn a bit, more cuts to show where the blood is coming from and emphasise the necklace a bit more.)